Another Write on Edge writing challenge! This was a quick one!
For Friday, a short challenge. Below are three fairly generic passive phrases. Your goal is to make them active in a short scene, either fiction or non-fiction. You can choose one, two, or all three to play with, but you only have 100 words.
- [he/she/I] was devastated by [...]
- [feeling] was experienced by [...]
- [person/thing] was possessed by [...]
Terror closed Alex’s throat every time he stepped in to the batter’s box.
He glanced at his coach and got his sign. He dug his feet in to the dirt, stamping down the fears and doubts, slicing up the worry with his cleats.
Check the knuckles, practice swing, take a deep breath. Bat up, eyes on the pitcher.
The crowd went wild, but Alex just ran, not looking for the ball, not hearing the words, just watching his coach windmilling his arms. He didn’t let himself think until his teammates met him at home plate.
Take that, fear.
This is only autobiographical in the sense that June means baseball. My first whack at this was about half again as long, and I would have liked to left in some of that, but 100 words is not very many! (In my original draft, the first pitch was a ball, and someone in the crowd chanted the inevitable “Good eye, good eye.” Trust me, I know all the chatter….).
Neither of my boys has hit a home run, but they have had some good hits in their last several games. On Tuesday, Joe was up to bat, hit a ground ball right between the first and second basemen and made it on base. Will was up to bat next.
He hit that ball in the SAME PLACE.